Book 1 – Ch.1 – Pg.13
Elliwiny: Sin and I agree that front loading all this exposition adds some friction to readers who are just starting out, but my real regret is all that empty floor space. We could have had more room for some more visual gags or Sara’s ass or something!
Sincerely: I assured Elli that this wouldn’t be too much exposition for chapter one, but I was wrong. At the very least I should’ve used shorter sentences so she could break it up into more speech bubbles.
You are correct, all that floor space, and not ONE visual gag about Sara’s ass :{
Instead of – or better still, in addition to – making visual gags about Sara’s ass, you could also have depicted a repairman working on a wall ventilator.